3 Tips for Editing to Deep POV PT 1

Last week I attended a webinar about using deep third person POV. Here are some tips gleaned from the presentation that you may find helpful you as I know they will  for me.

Editing for Deep POV

P. H. Solom

Editing for Deep POV

  1. Eliminate all words about thinking, seeing, etc. from the POV character. Instead let the internal dialog carry out that function.
  2. Eliminate all prepositional telling – those prepositional phrases that tell  about emotion, thoughts, moods, etc. of the POV character. Instead convey these by showing.

  3. Forego using words for emotion and state of being (angry, happy, sad, etc.) and use physical effects from the POV character’s actions, dialog, etc. Familiarize yourself with emotions and how to express them. A great book for this is The Emotion Thesaurus by Angela Akerman.

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Still need more pointers? Try these books for deeper POV explanations:

Rivet Your Readers with Deep Point of View by Jill Elizabeth Nelson

Writer’s Guide to Emotion: Fiction Writing Tools by Sherry Soule

Looking for more articles on POV? Check out Janice Hardy’s Fiction University.

I’ll share more tips from these books and the webinar over my next several posts and even expand on the concepts as well.

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P. H. Solomon lives in the greater Birmingham, AL area where he strongly dislikes yard work and sanding the deck rail. However, he performs these duties to maintain a nice home for his loved ones as well as the family’s German Shepherds. In his spare time, P. H. rides herd as a Computer Whisperer on large computers called servers (harmonica not required). Additionally, he enjoys reading, running, most sports and fantasy football. Having a degree in Anthropology, he also has a wide array of more “serious” interests in addition to working regularly to hone his writing. The Bow of Destiny is his first novel-length title with more soon to come.

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  1. I came to these late, and read them in reverse order. Great series, and nice to get the rules in someone else’s words. It helps them stick. I learned to eliminate what I call “stage directions” and it really helped. Things like “he saw” and “she thought.”

    1. Yep, it really cleans up the fiction. Some readers feel confused by the lack of “stage directions” but then they start using their imagination more while reading which gets them immersed in the story more.

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