Choices

The Bow of Destiny Commentary Pt. 2: The “Fit”

Introduction

I thought it would be interesting to share some commentary about the beginning of The Bow of Destiny now that the book has been out for a while, sold well and the next book should be released in just a few months. The Bow of Destiny has a curious beginning for many people that’s at once perplexing, confusing and intriguing. This effect is done on purpose and I’ll share a bit about it now.

The Bow of Destiny is written using the technique of deep point-of-view where readers hopefully become deeply engaged with the perceptions of the point-of-view character. There are a few other aspects mixed into this, one being that there are little, to no, dialogue tags in the book – all the dialogue is contextual. Secondly, with the deep point-of-view, internalization is signaled – or tagged – with physical actions by the character. As such, the internal thoughts, mood and emotions of the character are not italicized since these are deep enough into the chracter-reader engagement to not be set apart in such a way. Lastly, when italics are used it is for a specific, ongoing experience for the POV character. In such cases, hallucinations, dreams, memories, visions and other such experiences of the character are italicized as a special indicator that something different is happening for the character. I also used a present tense instead of past tense to cue the reader that this is a present experience for the character. It’s important to note that the tense only has changed and not the character POV.

The Fit

Athson has been afflicted with what he terms “fits” since he was orphaned. Something in his surrounding environment can set off these episodes where he re-lives his past – sometimes overlaid with his present. It’s actually a PTSD-like reaction to the violence of his past and can leave him rather confused

On top of this, Athson also sees other things like Spark, an imaginary mountain hound that’s been at his side since the incidents described in the first chapter. Athson takes an elven concoction called Soul’s Ease to prevent him from having “fits” or seeing Spark.

The opening scene gets confusing for Athson because he’s forgotten his Soul’s Ease. The instances of italics in this case are when Athson sees his traumatic past – in present tense. It emphasizes that something different is ongoing within Athson’s awareness. If you – as the reader – are confused, then it’s all good because Athson is confused and you are really deeply into his experiences. However, it’s important to remember that the character point-of-view does not change – only the tense has changed to emphasize Athson’s (in this case) experience has changed.

Athson knows that these “fits” give him a hard time differentiating what he sees for days so he assumes things like Spark are not real. However, these seem very real to him and he often gets caught up in them anyway – such as interacting with Spark.

Conclusion

So this is another layer to Athson’s point-of-view in the opening scene. As you can see, there are a lot of different aspects to this scene that might get overlooked. However, if you read it again you’ll see the clues along the way. By the way, there are a number of other subtleties throughout the book that you might find interesting on re-reading.

Next week, I’ll dig a little deeper into this opening scene and attempt to offer a bit more about Athson’s state of mind. I found this scene difficult, tricky and daring all at once so there are a lot of layers to what’s going in with Athson that set the stage for the whole story. Thanks for reading today. Please leave comments below and check back next week for another post about this topic.

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IMG_4154-EditAbout the Author

P. H. Solomon lives in the greater Birmingham, AL area where he strongly dislikes yard work and sanding the deck rail. However, he performs these duties to maintain a nice home for his loved ones as well as the family’s German Shepherds. In his spare time, P. H. rides herd as a Computer Whisperer on large computers called servers (harmonica not required). Additionally, he enjoys reading, running, most sports and fantasy football. Having a degree in Anthropology, he also has a wide array of more “serious” interests in addition to working regularly to hone his writing. The Bow of Destiny is his first novel-length title with more soon to come.

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Blog Tour: Choices by J. L. McFadden

Today, Archer’s Aim hosts a blog tour for Choices by J. L. McFadden via 4WillsPublishing. Take it away, J. L.

Adela

Adela

Height: 5’9

Hair Color: Black

Eye Color: Brown

Born: 1194 AD

Turned: 1215 AD

Job Description: Head of a coven in Lithuania

Gifts: Has ancestral abilities –strength and gifts vampires gains at a certain age.

Family: Deceased – accept her grandniece of many generations that she turned to save from a terminal illness.

Adela struggles with being attracted to her grandniece’s Guardian.

Gala

Gala Height: 5’6

Hair Color: Dirty Blonde

Eye Color: Ice Blue

Born: 1972 Turned: 1989

Job Description:  Adela’s right hand and C.O.O of the research company that is owned by the coven.

Gifts: Has a Guardian

Family: Deceased

Though her Guardian bond is so strong with John that she saved him from a car crash before his Guardian powers took hold, she finds herself wanting to push him away; she has never been able to handle any sort of relationship with anyone.

John

John

Height: 6’2

Hair Color: Black

Eye Color: Blue

Age: 23

Job Description: Guardian

Gifts: Guardians gain their supernatural powers from their bond with a vampire; their spirit is so connected to the vampire that if the vampire parishes the Guardian will soon follow.

Family: Deceased

He is torn between Adela and Gala: he feels is bond with Gala, but her constant rejections and fits is making it even harder to deal with his attraction to Adela. He wonders if his attraction is to Adela or is it due to the one ability she has gained through her ancestral powers – to be irresistible to anyone.

Priest

Priest

Eye color: Green Hair color: Dirty Blonde

Age: 32

Height: 5’11

Job description: Vampire Hunter from the Order of Hunters

Notes about: Priest was born in the order and quickly became one of the only hunters that were allowed to hunt alone.  After a near miss with death and the slaughter of the order he belonged to, he teamed up with Adela to try and track down the vampire that destroyed everything he had known and loved.  He is a man of few words and is known to vanish and reappear at unexpected times; his movements are so stealth that he is often compared to a ghost and at times a vampire.

Hannah

Hannah MacKay

Eye color: Red Hair color: Green

Turned:  Hannah was turned in the late 1800’s in her early 20’s

Height: 5’8

Job description: Vampire/being lippy

Notes about:  She is a ball of fire and attitude that does not play well with others. Adela is the only person in the world that she will listen to – and is completely loyal to – she is quick to brush off anyone else.  She is known for being one of fiercest fighters of vampires that has a short fuse.

No one has any photos or any other source of image of Vitally.

Vitally

Vitally

Eye color: Blue Hair color: Black

Turned: With his tightlipped secrecy not even Adela – the closest person to him – knows.

Height: 6’2

Job description: Ambassador/Historian/Spy

Notes about: Before he found Adela and helped her through her turning, there was no record of him. It is evident that he is much older than Adela by the things he knows, but he is a man of secrecy; he dabbles in the forbidden history of the vampires and is Adela’s spy. His official position is the Ambassador of Adela’s coven, but his unusual gift of slipping by people helps him gather the information. He has taught Adela many of the dead languages of vampires and people, but there is something he is looking for that he even conceals from her.

 

Author PhotoAuthor Bio:  J.L McFadden was born in  Pennsylvania and spent his life bouncing around the States until beginning to travel the world. Starting out he was a well-known musician in upstate New York that had a heavy playing schedule. Later he went back to his home state to work in the Lumber mills of the mountains. In California working in sales, management and even directed a small moving company until deciding to see the world. His travels around the world have allotted him to not only join an International Aikikai Aikido Federation, but have trained with Sanseis from Belgium, Ukraine, Russia and other European countries. He accounts his journeys and meeting of new people to his broad character types in his books.

 

 

Book CoverBook Blurb:  While still doubled over, picking up a book, Adela stated with a sultry voice, “One of these days, I am going to make you deliver on all of those promised ideas, running through your head when you watch me.” She had a playful sound to her voice with her smile, telling that fulfilling his dreams was not out of the question.

 

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